review over the paper

The paper we were assigned to read and grade for today, I gave it a 6. throught the whole paper i had a clear idea of what she was trying to say and the points she was trying to get across. i also enjoyed the paper because i've done a mission trip and although i didnt leave the country it is still very different to go to another place and see how differently they live from us. the flow from paragraph to paragraph was very smooth and she put her story into the paper very well too as well as the parts of articles she had researched on too. even without going to brazil and just from reading her paper i have a feel for what it is like there and how it is easy to take every day things for granted unlike the people over there. i enjoyed the paper mostly because i felt like i knew what she meant. it was almost as though she was telling me the story in person.